Essay LR

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 1) Copy and paste your feedback from the email in full - WWW, EBI and LR.

Audience essay feedback:

WWW:

·        Wow – this is phenomenal! You’ve written almost 1,400 words which demonstrates just how you’re stepping up to the challenges of GCSE level. Well done!

·        There are so many good points here where you discuss both audiences and industry in relation to the internet. You use examples in places and organise your essay into paragraphs that explore ideas related to the question. This is an excellent skill that will be vital in 20-mark exam essay questions.

EBI:

·        The key to improve is to focus on sentence structure – particularly topic sentences. This is the first sentence in a paragraph and a topic sentence needs to be clear, simple and lead the reader to understand what will follow. Make sure every topic sentence focuses sharply on the question and develops your argument.

·        In general, clearer sentence structure will help – pay more attention to spelling, grammar and word choice. You have excellent content but you need to proofread your work to check it makes grammatical sense for your reader. At GCSE level, good written English is essential!

·        As an example of this, read your introduction back. The first sentence is 43 words on its own and difficult to follow. You want to make sure your essay opens with a really clear argument so the examiner knows you are a top-grade student!

LR:

Complete the LR tasks on the GCSE Media Year 1 blog – Audience and Industry essay feedback LR.


2) What was the word count for your essay?

1,358 words 7,642 characters

3) What was your strongest paragraph? Why do you think it was better than others?

My strongest paragraph is Music industry, this is because i had the most knowledge and information for that subject.

4) What was your weakest paragraph? Why do you think it wasn't as good as others?

My weakest paragraph is newspaper changes, this is because i had barely any knowledge over the newspaper industry.

5) How can you improve your extended writing in GCSE Media Studies in future?

Have clearer sentance structure and making gramatical sense not just writing a lot.

6) Write ONE thing you have learned about the internet, audience and industry from completing this essay.


I learnt that the internet has made a drastic change to how the world now works. i have learnt that audiences decide whether media is viral or not and that all the industries have disadvantages .














































































































































































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